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Project 3 Peer Review

My partner for this peer review was Sam. We used the peer review guidelines from Project 1 and commented on aspects from those guidelines. We mainly focused on finding claims, and evidence used from the sources. This style of peer review was helpful to me because we talked about what we wanted to focus on in our essay, so I got feedback on transitions and integrating sources, which I will focus on in my final draft.

Update: I thought the second peer review post in class was helpful because I had the same partner (Sam). We talked about some of the comments that we made, and we were able to make corrections and suggestions about MLA citations and wording issues.

Main Sources Post

The active reading strategy I used for these sources was annotation. I highlighted important quotes or pieces of information that I thought were important, and might be used in the essay. With the information that I highlighted I briefly summarized it or explained why it was important.

Revisiting “Diary” Post

The information in the sources I listened to got me thinking about what data gets collected from my online habits. On my phone, I will often see ads on instagram or facebook for products that I was just recently looking at and thinking about buying. For example, at the beginning of the year I bought a brand of granola that I hadn’t eaten before, and a few days later I saw an ad for it on instagram. It makes sense for marketing but seems like an invasion of privacy, and that something is always listening to what you are doing. It’s interesting how in other countries such as China, this invasion of privacy, and not being able to control gets access to your data is already common. Hopefully, this doesn’t go on and won’t become more common across the world.

Learning Outcomes

One other learning outcome that I feel I improved on in this process was 1. “Demonstrate the ability to approach writing as a recursive process that requires substantial revision of drafts for content, organization, and clarity (global revision), as well as editing and proofreading (local revision).” I thought that doing global revision first allowed to focus on looking for areas to change in content and structure during the revision process. I was able to make adjustments to certain transitions and my naysayer paragraph by using this learning outcome. Also, it was easier for me to focus on local revision and picking out errors there, after the global revision was already done.

MLA and Surface Level Revision

Today, while working on MLA and surface level revision I focused mainly on comma use. In project 1 I had a lot of issues with missing commas and run on sentences. In the project 2 revision process I looked mainly for sentences where I needed an introductory comma, and I also looked for run on sentences that needed a comma splice. I noticed in my essay that I did not use many commas, and that there were many run on sentences. After rereading it a few times, and picking out sentences that sounded strange, I was able to recognize where commas were needed, and I made sure to add them correctly.

Device Diary

When we first met, we played a lot of games such as temple run and candy crush. At the beginning, we would watch a lot of youtube and take a lot of pictures. As the years went on, I have been dropped more times than I can count, and got a little scratched up. However, I have a new screen and case now, so I am doing well.

Life now is a little different. A lot of the time we scroll on social media mindlessly, which gets pretty boring after a while. I wish we would do something else once in a while. We listen to a lot of music, and sometimes it’s the same few songs over and over again. We watch a lot of Netflix and talk to our friends which is fun.

Social Media and Self Prewriting

The prewriting strategy I used was the traditional outline, and I referenced Little Seagull to see how to set it up. This was somewhat of a new strategy for me, because in the last project I used a web for pre writing. I liked this style and thought it was effective because I was able to get all my ideas out, and figure out which resources I will be using. I think this will be helpful to me when writing the essay.

Chunking Annotation

While using the chunking annotation method I highlighted and bracketed claims and underlined evidence or arguments that could be used to support that claim. I did not do much extra annotation because I had highlighted or underlined most of the paper. Some of the pros for this process were that I feel like I was able to find all of the claims and understand the writers main argument. However, some cons would be that I felt the process to be very cluttered and I was only focused on finding the claims. Personally, I don’t think this style works the best for me and I felt I would have been more efficient with another method.

TREAC Paragraph

[Topic]Today, many people believe that smartphones and social media are essentially destroying our generation. [Restriction]The biggest worries are that technology and social media are leading to a lack of communication and mental health problems. [Exhibit]For example, in the article “Have Smartphones Destroyed a Generation ?” journalist Jean Twenge expresses her concern about how smartphones and social media have “changed every aspect of teenagers’ lives, from the nature of their social interactions to their mental health”. [Analysis]Twenge’s view is accurate regarding smartphones causing significant changes. It is true that smartphones have affected our mental health and communication skills. However, we cannot say smartphones are the sole cause of these negative changes, as other factors such as lack of sleep, stress of daily life, and experiencing traumatic events are huge factors in mental health. [Conclusion] While smartphones and social media can be held somewhat responsible for changes is communication and mental health of our generation they are not the sole factor as the world we live in is drastically changing as well.

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