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Month: November 2019

Project 3 Peer Review

November 18, 2019 / / 0 Comments

My partner for this peer review was Sam. We used the peer review guidelines from Project 1 and commented on aspects from those guidelines. We mainly focused on finding claims, and evidence used from the sources. This style of peer review was helpful to me because we talked about what we wanted to focus on in our essay, so I got feedback on transitions and integrating sources, which I will focus on in my final draft.

Update: I thought the second peer review post in class was helpful because I had the same partner (Sam). We talked about some of the comments that we made, and we were able to make corrections and suggestions about MLA citations and wording issues.

Main Sources Post

November 18, 2019 / / 0 Comments
  • Source #1 Storing Health Records On Your Phone: Can Apple Live Up To Its Privacy Values?
  • Source #2 Google Searches For Ways To Put Artificial Intelligence To Use In Health Care
  • Source #3 Medical Big Data: Promise and Challenges

The active reading strategy I used for these sources was annotation. I highlighted important quotes or pieces of information that I thought were important, and might be used in the essay. With the information that I highlighted I briefly summarized it or explained why it was important.

Revisiting “Diary” Post

November 3, 2019 / / 0 Comments

The information in the sources I listened to got me thinking about what data gets collected from my online habits. On my phone, I will often see ads on instagram or facebook for products that I was just recently looking at and thinking about buying. For example, at the beginning of the year I bought a brand of granola that I hadn’t eaten before, and a few days later I saw an ad for it on instagram. It makes sense for marketing but seems like an invasion of privacy, and that something is always listening to what you are doing. It’s interesting how in other countries such as China, this invasion of privacy, and not being able to control gets access to your data is already common. Hopefully, this doesn’t go on and won’t become more common across the world.

Learning Outcomes

November 3, 2019 / / 0 Comments

One other learning outcome that I feel I improved on in this process was 1. “Demonstrate the ability to approach writing as a recursive process that requires substantial revision of drafts for content, organization, and clarity (global revision), as well as editing and proofreading (local revision).” I thought that doing global revision first allowed to focus on looking for areas to change in content and structure during the revision process. I was able to make adjustments to certain transitions and my naysayer paragraph by using this learning outcome. Also, it was easier for me to focus on local revision and picking out errors there, after the global revision was already done.

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